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FINALLY some... form of character sheet! lol
just took me so long b/c.. well it takes time to come up w/ a rough draft of a character D: meh I'm just easily distracted,
but here's a SERIOUS rough draft of her personality/story... kinda
I'm winging it, really
.....it's what I do, =___=
oh yea, decided that as much as I enjoy 'laurana'... her nickname from now on is 'rennie'
any comments/suggestions/critique just throw it out there!
just took me so long b/c.. well it takes time to come up w/ a rough draft of a character D: meh I'm just easily distracted,
but here's a SERIOUS rough draft of her personality/story... kindaI'm winging it, really
.....it's what I do, =___=
oh yea, decided that as much as I enjoy 'laurana'... her nickname from now on is 'rennie'
any comments/suggestions/critique just throw it out there!
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Interesting character. But I do want to point out a few weaknesses in your character if you don't mind (but I'm doing it anyway)
Ok, first of all. Love the hair. But remember, TP is 18th century style clothing + pirate-y clothing. This looks too contemporary. The hair suits a pirate girl, but the shirt and tank really kills it. Look up Peter Pan, Pirates of the Caribbean (pfft, even the old Treasure Island movie) perhaps the Golden Compass as well (because TP is cybersteampunk sci-fi) for clothing ideas. The locket is just fine though.
You mentioned "her behaviour even went as far as to soften even the most stubborn of pirates" eep! That is a Mary-Sue trait so don't fall into that pit hole. It's not like just looking at her behaviour would really tame a free spirited pirate. I also feel that her body is a bit too small to fit her stubborn tough cookie personality (unless she's in her preteen-teen age.) Even though the cute bruiser trope exists, but I feel somehow she needs to have a few scars and bruises somewhere. The pirates from PotC are believable because of the amount of violence there is. The characters get hurt and get scars that looks like it would take a super freakishly long time to heal.
Anyway, I hope I helped. It'll be interesting to see if you could improve with these points in mind (but don't let these dictate you. lol. They're really just suggestions)
Ok, first of all. Love the hair. But remember, TP is 18th century style clothing + pirate-y clothing. This looks too contemporary. The hair suits a pirate girl, but the shirt and tank really kills it. Look up Peter Pan, Pirates of the Caribbean (pfft, even the old Treasure Island movie) perhaps the Golden Compass as well (because TP is cybersteampunk sci-fi) for clothing ideas. The locket is just fine though.
You mentioned "her behaviour even went as far as to soften even the most stubborn of pirates" eep! That is a Mary-Sue trait so don't fall into that pit hole. It's not like just looking at her behaviour would really tame a free spirited pirate. I also feel that her body is a bit too small to fit her stubborn tough cookie personality (unless she's in her preteen-teen age.) Even though the cute bruiser trope exists, but I feel somehow she needs to have a few scars and bruises somewhere. The pirates from PotC are believable because of the amount of violence there is. The characters get hurt and get scars that looks like it would take a super freakishly long time to heal.
Anyway, I hope I helped. It'll be interesting to see if you could improve with these points in mind (but don't let these dictate you. lol. They're really just suggestions)